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Leech the walls, leech the walls around you
You parasitic parasite
Watching as you expedite
The world around you and everything
That means a thing to you

You don't give a damn do you
You don't give a damn, do you? you do
Then take down the walls
And expose yourself for what you are

I can bet that the fever inside you can't be quelled
By simple blood and quick fixes
And mind games and permissive
Hand gestures saying yes, come hither
As you slither through their veins
Watching as you gain
Anything? nothing.

Suck the person closest to you
Suck their spirit and their eyes
As you wallow in their spine-less-ne-ss
As you like to do
Because you're the fool here

Take her trust and her love
And shove it because
It's not important, it never was
What was important only becomes
The reconciliation of blood and loss
Blood and loss, it's a toss-up
You can get it both any day

Slither and slime and worm away
And decay and relay
That nothing really mattered to you
Nothing
Because it was all just a game
And you are the incubus in both ways
And I'll say
Isn't it nice that you sucked me dry
Because I was perspiring without all your lies.
©2009-2010 ~MiNiSoRcErEsS
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Much more accurate.

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Lovely piece! Feels a little choppy, but that could just be me. The part I found most powerful was, "Hand gestures saying yes, come hither
As you slither through their veins
Watching as you gain
Anything? nothing." It also has a lovely flow that some other areas lack. But again, that could just be me. Overall, a well done poem!

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"Ignorance is bliss, my friend. Don't burden yourself with the secrets of scary people."
:iconminisorceress:
Thank you so much =D I can see where you get that
I did stop quite a bit while I was writing, I haven't written in ages so I'm a bit rusty with flow D: But I'm sure that will come more easily with time!
Thanks for the critique, I appreciate it :D

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You
are a failed attempt to capsulize a feeling.

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